song doesnt add to it and you havnt even used it to cut with beats the cuts are slow and long you dont have the copyright it doesnt have a pace so you dont get a beg mid end so you never get into it the white balance goes totally off in a few shots
all in all if i was your tutor id have failed you sorry.
the riding was good ! the editing was kind of the same all the way though. i reckon picking a different song, putting the film to the music and having more of a beginning, middle, end thing like you said ! would make it much better. it was a little bit too light aswell still pretty good though!
id say no as the tracks to slow yet the music is too paced, you dont have enough clips to make a fast cut peice so id suggest going for something more along the lines of ambient / yann tiersen type "arty" music.
you'd get more marks at college for that aswell no doubt.
also just drop the blue looking shots it really detracts either that or grade them.
the first 10seconds gets old really fast as it doesnt climax to anything particularly, maybe make this bit 3 minutes instead.
glad you did a re edit tho, shows you can take crits.
ok, so more arty farty lol. yeah well its you lot (the general public) that pay Editors, filmers and the such wage's so hearing your criticism is much better in the learning process'.
most people at the specialist college i go to don't take or give criticism due to them being scared of having views, cheers guys ill have a bit more of a work when i have some free time.. DJ